THE EIGHT YEARS REVOLUTION

You are the young Monarch of Ahabalad, a land of wide deserts and rocky mountains. Or rather, you were, until your people, starving under the rule of the Regent — your uncle, rebelled against your dynasty and started a revolution. To survive, you have to flee your country with the help of your trusted knight, Sir Mansoor, and your tutor, Lady Domara, and take refuge in the underground kingdom of Telidrica, where the Dwarves live.

Lagodoro, the Dwarven capital city, is an impressive and intriguing underground metropolis. But it is also dangerous. There, you will train and regroup in order to, one day, retake what is yours.

That is, if you want to...

The Eight Years Revolution is rated 13+, at the moment.

FEATURES

The Eight Years Revolution is an interactive fiction set in a 19th-century-inspired fantasy world where you play as a young monarch fleeing the revolution that has started in their country.

  • You can customize your character and choose their gender (non-binary/female/male).
  • Your monarch will develop different character traits and abilities that will impact how they interact with the world.
  • 5 characters of various genders are available for your character to romance.
  • As the story progress, you will be able to decide what type of monarch you want to be and how to deal the revolution: will you crush the rebels or support their budding republic?


ROMANCE OPTIONS

SIR AJMAL MANSOOR (M) - 20 / 28 - You've known the young knight almost all your life. He has been your bodyguard for three years now and will not leave your side as you flee your country. It is his duty to protect you, after all.

ZANETTA CALVIO (F) - 22 / 30 - As you arrive in Lagodoro, you meet Zanetta, a young Dwarven woman with quite an attitude. She's here to make sure you settle safely into your new environment, but can you trust her?

FELICE (NB) - 19 / 27 - During your time in Lagodoro, you will meet this young Merperson who seems to have taken a special interest in you. They are charming and pleasant, but is that all there is to them. What do they really want from you?

ARMINE SAHAKIAN (F) - 18 / 26 - As you navigate Lagodoro's high society, you will meet this young Elven woman who has a reputation as a divination prodigy. She's friendly and carefree, but Zanetta urges you to not take her at face value, for some reason.

BERHANE KAHSU TIHUN (M/F) - 21 / 29 - You know them as the younger sibling to the Sarnean Queen. Their nation has been invaded by yours after the assassination of your parents on their soil. They now lead their people's resistance and seek to give their sister her throne back. They obviously hold a few grudges...


PROGRESS

At the moment, only chapter 1  and part of chapter 2 are available.


CONTACT

If you want to be updated about any news about the Eight Years Revolution, you can follow me on tumblr. You can also join the game's discord server to discuss 8YR or give feedback.

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Thank you for reading!

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I just finished playing the demo and totally love it! The story and the characters are very interesting, I liked the choices you can make and how other characters react. It's really nice! 

Thanks so much for the effort! I hope to see more in the future ヾ(❀╹◡╹)ノ~♡

Ah, I really enjoyed that one! Though I can't wait to meet Berhane - they are the love interest I'm truly interested in.

I like the writing style and the interactions with the characters - though I can't talk about flavor text since I only have a single MC and I can't look at the code to see the variables outside of the game itself.

I did not notice any technical or continuity / choice consequences related issues, really. Maybe one thing that bothered me a bit was at the start of chapter 2, there was that little segment that starts with "You looked much different than when you first arrived. Better rested, of course, but also fitter. Learning combat with Sir Mansoor was already bearing fruit and you could see the results in your reflection." - it was a bit strange to me since my MC's stats did not reflect that, considering I had no martial prowess increase in chapter 1 so the stat was 0 at that point, but it isn't a big issue either since there is an increase a couple of pages after that.

One thing that I found a bit strange is that MC wasn't yet on the throne at 18 years old. Usually, in settings like this one, I'd expect the new monarch to take the throne when they are around 15 or 16 years old, so the MC being considered still too young at 18 was very strange to me. Maybe it would be good to add a more detailed explanation about why is that. Like, a past monarch that took the throne at that age and went mad with a power they were not mature enough to wield or something like that. Really, it's just a random idea. This isn't that big of a deal either, though - I guess I'm nitpicking a bit.

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Hi! I'm glad you enjoyed the story and thank you for your input!

The stat thing I don't think is too much of an issue?  And I can't add any point before the player chooses their MC's secondary and tertiary stat. The stat are more functional than any real representation of MC's skills, to be honest. But I'll think about it, maybe there is a better way to present the stats in the character sheets.

MC's age is more comfortable like it is now for me and other readers. It's also very cultural and in a fantasy setting I don't think it's that jarring. An explanation, I feel, would break the pace of the story. I feel like it's not unreasonable to have a culture where they want the future monarch to have a thorough education before starting to rule either.

Thank you again! I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story and Berhane's romance!

It's okay, these are not major issues or anything, so still thank you for answering them!

By the way, I didn't think about a huge explanation for the age thing, eh, just one line in the passing, or something not dedicated to it per se, like during a lesson or whatever. But again, that's not a big thing in itself! I don't have a problem with it being as it is, it just felt a bit strange to me. I guess I'm the type of person who is more about context and setting than paralels to our modern society, so I don't mind younger characters in setting like this one, even if there is romance, but I guess I understand it can bother people. I honestly even didn't consider it was a factor!

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Really great story so far - I love your writing style and the use of imagery! When I got to the end I was so absorbed in the story that I literally said, 'What? No! Come on...', out loud. lol
I'm really liking these characters a lot too - Ajmal, Zanetta and the princess are all quite interesting so far, and I can't wait to read the next part when it comes out. <3
But yeah, you've done a fantastic job so far! :D

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying the story and the characters! I'm excited to share more of the story as soon as I can. Sadly it takes a lot of time to write interactive fiction. 😩

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I genuinely don't think I've ever seen a setting that blends cultures and fantasy races/tropes quite like this one -- I'm really looking forward to getting a clearer picture as the story continues. Your interpretation of the typical fantasy dwarf tropes has been interesting so far and I’m hyped to see what you’ve thought up for your interpretation of merfolk! 

I was also pleasantly surprised by how different some of the dialogue tree options are — you could see completely different things if you play a certain way, according to a certain personality trait or another.

Okay, I have some constructive feedback to go over as well — I really hope it isn’t overwhelming. I’m going to all this effort writing this up because I like this story so far and I want to be as helpful of a reader as possible, especially in these early, formative stages of the project.  If at any point this isn’t feedback you want, please feel free to just delete my comment or block me or something. I spent a long time going through the demo and writing this up with the best of intentions — if anything comes across as rude, that is by no means intentional!

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This is the most important piece of feedback I have, so, while it’s a bit serious, I’m going to put it first: the age gaps. If my comprehension based on context clues is correct, Sir Mansoor is an adult, while the PC is a child. A potential romantic pairing between two individuals aged sixteen and nineteen (if he was assigned at 16, 3 years ago) has a bit of a gross feel to me. It also presents some potential legal issues re: sex, grooming, manipulation. (Same with Zanetta — her age isn’t specified, but to me, she seems closer to thirty or so than sixteen.) 

I think it’s worth being careful about this — 16 and 19 isn’t pedophilia, but for people who notice it, that age pairing is still likely to come off poorly regardless of the fantasy setting. I’m not saying you have to make the PC older, but I will say: it doesn’t look like it would affect the plot negatively to have the monarch be ambiguously a young adult of some sort (i.e. 18+) instead of explicitly underage. 

If I'm misinterpreting context clues, then I'd respectfully suggest maybe specifying the love interests' ages -- the fact that PC is a child warrants extra transparency, in my opinion.

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Okay! Now with that out of the way, I’ll get into the grammar stuff.

So, this is kind of hard to explain, but there are some intricacies around plurals when specifying people's age that I noticed got switched around some in the demo. You use the phrasing "a sixteen years old" a few times, but this is slightly off -- I've written out a couple of explanations below. 

  •  "I am sixteen years old." /  "I was to be coronated at seventeen."
    • (The “years old” is implied in casual dialogue, but either way is fine.)
  • "I am a sixteen-year-old." / "You're rather intense for a sixteen-year-old kid." 
    • (When age is specified as a singular noun or adjective, everything is hyphenated and no 's' is needed on the end of “year.”)

Finally, here are some other, smaller things:

  • The first sentence of Ch1 was unclear to me — “You remember the….” I just… don’t know what this sentence is talking about. It’s also in a different tense to everything else (present). I think maybe some further setup would help clarify?
  • I’m a bit confused about the technology of the setting — they have complex hearing aids and prosthetics but also use typewriters and, seemingly, bladed weapons as a standard? Is this going to be clarified as a magic system thing later or something?
  • The phrasing of this sentence in particular took me some labor to understand: “The knight who was assigned to you to act as your bodyguard was still very young, but his water green eyes were already hardened by battle.“

There are a lot of minor mistakes throughout the demo, but it isn’t practical for me to go over everything, especially considering this is an early draft. I gave some corrections for the ones that stuck out to me the most below, but I’d definitely consider hiring an editor down the line if I were you. Your work has good bones and I would love to see it thrive. I'm rooting for your progress!! :)

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Assorted typos and miscellaneous notes: 

    • “…draping his shoulder”
      • Should be “draping over/across/atop/along/etc his shoulder.You need a preposition there.
    • “…rows afer rows of stalactites…”
      • Missing letter in “after.” Also, standard phrasing is either “row after row” or “rows upon rows,” but “rows after rows” is not typically used.
    • “If I can be blunt”
      • Should be “if I may be blunt”
    • “the ginger grip of his hand”
      • Did you mean “gentle”? Or maybe you were trying to make an adjective out of the adverb “gingerly,” in which case, that's not possible. “Ginger” as an adjective exclusively means “red- or orange-colored.
    • King Pace the Twenty First“
      • Should be “twenty-first” or “21st.” If you’re feeling official, “King Pace XXI” is the most correct but least conversational writing.
    • “Him or any official will never speak of your presence here.”
      • Odd phrasing and grammar. Could say either “He and his officials will never speak of your presence here,” or “Neither he nor any official will speak of your presence here.”
    • "My people, who has been..."
      • Should be “who have been” — ‘my people’ is plural
    • “bring the luggages upstairs"
      • “Luggage” is already plural.
    • Candle light
      • “Candlelight” is one word
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Hello!

I'm really glad you enjoyed the story and setting. Thank you so much for all the feedback! I will look into all the grammar issues and typos as soon as I can. I will get into MC's age and the ROs in a moment, because you're right, it is an important point. But first, about the setting and technology: the technology is mostly inspired by our world's late 19th-century technology, but it is definitely influenced by magic as well. The prosthetics, for example, are enchanted, they use magic to function. And swords are present but not necessarily the main weapons, there are guns as well, but they're not always reliable. Hopefully, all of this will get clearer as we explore the world.
I will probably reformulate the first sentence of the story. When I wrote it, I wanted to make the first chapter a prologue set in the past and then going to a 'present day' in the next chapter. But things have changed since then, so I'll eventually remove the 'I remember' part.

Now for the age issue: I'm very aware of how MC being 16 at the beginning of the story can be worrisome, when it comes to romance. I gave all the ROs' ages on my tumblr blog, but I realize that maybe not everyone will see it so I'll edit the page here to add them. At the very beginning of the story, Ajmal is 19, Zanetta is 21, Felice is 18, Armine is 16 and Berhane is 20. Which means that yes, at this point, beside Armine, all the ROs are adults (even if young ones). And this is why no relationship will start before MC is at the very least 18. There can be some feelings on MC's part and on some of the ROs part (like Ajmal who grew up with MC, Armine and Felice), but none of them will act on them until everyone is an adult.

Maybe the title doesn't make this clear enough, in which case I will specify this, but the story will happen over the course of 8 years and I never planned to have anything, relationship-wise, happen before much later in the game. They will take time to build up. Zanetta, being the oldest RO, will not even consider MC romantically before much later. Her romance will likely develop a lot slower than everyone else's. As for Berhane, we won't meet him in-game until much later and MC will be at least 18 by then.

That being said, there are some romance elements in the game already, notably with Ajmal. I tried to keep those moments age-appropriate and I hope I achieved that. If not, please let me know so I can figure out how to tone them down. Hopefully, Ajmal's reservations are obvious. You can flirt with Zanetta somewhat, but she will (gently) push MC away.

As for MC's age, I would definitely have made them older right from the beginning of the story if it was not, in fact, plot-relevant. The MC needed to be young enough to not be considered able to rule Ahabalad and be in need of a Regent to rule in their stead. That being said, I'm open to the idea to make the age to be eligible to rule a bit older, but that might require some heavy rework on the story that might have to wait on the second draft unless it feels like it needs to be changed earlier.

Lastly, I want to precise that there won't be any explicit sex scenes in this game. Sex might be talked about, but like for the relationships, not until much much later in the game, when everyone involved is an adult.

I'm really sorry if the story made you uncomfortable, I really want to avoid that by any means. If there are specific passages in the game that you felt were inappropriate, I'd like to know so I can improve on them.

I hope that clears things up! Thank you for taking the time to write all this feedback!

EDIT: After some thinking, I've decided to go ahead and change MC's starting age to 18. (A few of the ROs will be 1 or 2 years older as well, to fit MC's age and the new timeline better.) It's better that I make the change sooner rather than later, as it would be a lot more work if I wait. I hope this will make things a bit more comfortable for you and other readers! (And it honestly will feel better for me as well and some things in the story will actually make more sense I think.)

I will start working on editing the story to fit that decision and the changes will take effect in the next update.

I definitely did not realize the slow-burn pace you were going for in regards to relationships, just because of how quickly players are given the option to actively flirt. Most of the response I would have given is now void given your decision about the ages, but I will say that I'm sorry my comment presumably had to be what pushed you to make a decision that is now giving you more editing work! I know the pain. Nevertheless, I'm definitely in favor of the change.

In regards to your question about specific scenes, I think Zanetta's flirtatious teasing currently comes off as slightly over the line in the scene where the MC can ask her about her family. As a 20-year-old, I know I wouldn't ever assume a high-school-aged kid was trying to come on to me, nor would I (even jokingly) engage in teasing one flirtatiously. In my opinion, this is essentially absolved by changing the MC's age to 18, but I figured I would mention it specifically just in case you still wanted to know. It's definitely not egregious, but I for sure had the thought of, "Excuse me, ma'am? This is a high-school-aged child!" 

I didn't see any other red flags in my speedrunning all the romance scenes, though! Ajmal's freaking out when confronted by a perhaps overly-forward MC feels very realistic and reasonable given his...rather complicated situation, and I think that attitude could easily carry over to an 18-year-old MC. After all, they're still a ruler (and probably somewhat intimidating as a result) as well as a slightly-younger childhood friend, which in itself presents all kinds of delightful possibilities for emotional turmoil.

But, overall, I'm really glad my comments didn't come off the wrong way. I'm looking forward to the update, and I wish you good luck with writing and editing!! I'm really loving the story so far, and while I don't go on the interactive-fiction side of tumblr much, just to avoid all the behind-the-scenes character spoilers, I gave your page a follow and I'm excited to be along for the ride. :)

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Don’t be sorry for being the one that initiated the thought process that led me to take that decision! Even if it’s more work, I think it’s for the best and will make everyone, me included, more comfortable. I really appreciate how nicely you brought up the subject too. Thank you so much for that!

Gonna throw this out there re: the age gap. It's totally possible for two people to be involved with each other while both are under the age of 18 and then have one cross the threshold. My "high school sweetheart" and I had a three-year age gap but we started dating when I was 14 and he was 17. By the time we broke up, I was 16 and he was 19 (and still just graduated high school b/c he started school late), so - to me, at least - the 16, 19 age-gap isn't inherently "gross." 

Just figured I'd offer a different perspective based on my actual life lol.

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Thanks for your input! I’ve asked different people their opinions on this and they vary of course. I think the age gap between MC and Zanetta is the one that can cause most issues. In any case, I prefer aging MC up a bit, it’s an easy solution to make everyone more comfortable.

I really love it so far! I really love this method of storytelling, where I can be a part of the story, and you have started a really awesome story here! Thanks!

That's why I love interactive fiction so much! There's a lot of wonderful stories like that out there. ❤️I'm really glad you like mine so far!

whoo!! thoroughly enjoyed this! love your writing and it keeps me wanting more! love it!

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Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! 🥰

great work here! i love the way you make us decide our physical appearance

Thanks! Those cycling links really came in handy, hehe!

This is really great! I enjoyed it, especially with the disabilities options because I am hard of hearing too :)

I’m glad you liked it! I hope I’ll be able to treat each disability respectfully and if at any point I write something that’s not right or makes you feel uncomfortable, please let me know!

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Wow this is easily a favorite, I admire your work! Can't wait to see more of it :D

Thank you so much! ❤️💕

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Ahhh I’m already hooked!!! You did an awesome job!! Dont stress yourself too much whilst writing

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Thank you so much! I'm really happy you liked it so far. =) I'm not stressing myself, don't worry, but I definitely am excited about getting more out there for you lovely people. =)

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Love this! Cannot wait to play Sir Mansoor's route! <3 Will there be angst? Pining?? Fluff??? Gah, so excited!!!

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Thank you for reading it! :)

Sir Mansoor’s route is allll angst, pining and fluff, lol.

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Already in love with Zanetta, pls send help!!

Good, very good. *steeples fingers*